This is amazing, I love the onomatopoeia! I like how you said "I am the weakest and slowest." Maybe when you said " I ran into the water a crocodile" could have a comma after water? I love the amount of punctuation in your presentation!
I liked your post Alexis. because you used an onomatopoeia, comers,full stops, exclamation mark but you might want to you ran into the water because why would you run into the water if you know theirs crocodiles in the river
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This is amazing, I love the onomatopoeia! I like how you said "I am the weakest and slowest." Maybe when you said " I ran into the water a crocodile" could have a comma after water? I love the amount of punctuation in your presentation!
ReplyDeleteI liked your post Alexis. because you used an onomatopoeia, comers,full stops, exclamation mark but you might want to you ran into the water because why would you run into the water if you know theirs crocodiles in the river
ReplyDeleteHi Alexis I really enjoyed reading your story because all the descriptive words in your story
ReplyDeleteThat was really good Alexis. I like how you were using lots of punctuation. Maybe next time you can make the text bigger and more slides.
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